Dan Porat killed the engine and sat in the dark. He’d been redialing for twenty-three minutes since he got the message early Friday evening. Nothing.
He stepped into the storm. The site was deserted. A bulldozer was abandoned in the mud. Porat’s flashlight cut through the downpour and found the breach. A ragged mouth was torn into the limestone wall.
Inside, the air was damp and dusty from the pulverized chalky stone.
The operator lay twisted on the floor, neck broken, eyes staring upward. Porat knelt and checked for a pulse. Nothing. He stared at the corpse, weighing his options.
A pale shape gleamed on the carved ledge on his right. An ossuary. Grape clusters and an inscription were chiseled into the side. Not too unusual for the era. He leaned closer, squinting through wet glasses, and then he noticed it.
Three photos—flash, click, flash—then rice paper and charcoal. The rasp of charcoal on paper sounded too loud in the cave as the letters took shape.
He looked back at the body. An unnatural bulge under the worker’s shirt. Porat reached in. Cold glass. A cobalt blue goblet, miraculously unbroken.
A heartbeat of hesitation. The fanatics will smash it. He slid the glass into his satchel.
As he ducked out of the cave, he scanned the opposite ridge and felt a chill. A black Mercedes sat idling on the access road facing him. Amber parking lights glinted off a black-on-white diplomatic plate.
Porat’s pulse spiked. He looked down at his phone. He had driven straight here the moment he got the message. How could anyone else know?
Unless they were listening.
He walked quickly to the Land Rover, forcing himself not to run. He threw it into gear and rolled down the slope at normal speed. In the mirror the Mercedes never moved. It simply watched him go, two amber points in the storm, until the road curved and the lights disappeared.
Yehuda Veingarten’s fingers still smelled of cloves and cinnamon from the Havdalah spice box as he turned on his Pelephone. Shabbat was over. The apartment still glowed with the sanctity of twenty-five hours cut off from the world.
Then a blinking envelope icon appeared. He pressed play.
The Arab’s frantic Hebrew: “French Hill… Cave… white box…”
Veingarten immediately dialed Deutsch. “A new burial site. Bring signs, loudspeakers—everything. If the Chilonim touched one bone, we shut the city down.”
He hung up, glanced at the sink piled high with Shabbos dishes, then at the children. They were watching him.
“I have to go, kinderlach,” he said softly, kneeling to kiss their foreheads. “Kavod hameis...”
He pulled on his long black frock coat, buttoned it with precision, and grabbed his hat. “…tonight our ancestors have no one else to speak for them.”
“To Samir! The only man who wears cologne to a salvage dig!”
Stacey Rubin laughed over the rim of her plastic cup. The apartment that Amos and Samir shared was loud, hazy with cigarette smoke, and packed with Hebrew U grad students.
Her Nokia rattled against her hip. She checked the ID and frowned. Porat.
She slipped out onto the balcony. “Hello?”
“I’m downstairs. Get Amos and Samir.” Porat’s voice was tense, more than she had ever heard before.
“Dan? What’s going…” She held her free hand against her ear to block out the jarring noise from the party.
“Just move, Stacey. There’s been an incident at a new site in French Hill.” He paused, and she could hear the windshield wipers slashing. “If the Haredim get there first, we could lose what’s buried there forever.”
We have to claim it first,” he said. “Now.”
The line went dead. Stacey stared at the phone. The music still played inside, but the warmth of the evening had vanished.
She slipped back inside, scanning the room for Samir and Amos. “Porat’s downstairs. He needs us now. Grab your boots.” Amos stubbed his cigarette; Samir set down his glass of Black Label.
Stacey turned to the crowd in the room, “Keep the party going. We’ll be back soon!”
Then quietly to Samir and Amos, “Let’s move it. Porat sounded unhinged.”
Shmuel’s Corner: I need your help!
Your perspective is important to me.
Did the multiple points of view feel cohesive and easy to follow?
What did you learn about the stakes — and did they feel urgent?
Which character intrigued you most in this chapter — and why?
Please share your answers, suggestions and corrections in the comments below. I read every single note you leave!
My first thoughts in Chapter 1 were of the Qumran Cave discovery years ago. In chapter 2, I began to think of the ongoing conflict between the Haredim and the secular. Neither of my thoughts may have a thing to do with where the story goes, but I’m just giving my initial thoughts.
Shmuel
· January 19, 2026 at 4:47 pm
Thanks Susan… A major theme of the book is the contrasting world views of the religious and the secular. It plays itself out every day here in Jerusalem. It will be a major factor in the next elections. By the way, the novel occurs in March of 1999, a month before the elections. Ehud Barak and Binyanim Netanyahu are battling to become Prime Minister.
ChanaEster
· January 22, 2026 at 12:35 am
I immediately picked up on what Susan said–simplistically, it appears to be protecting archeological evidence of our ancient history and connection with The Land versus the religious obligation to honor the dead and treat the body with integrity (isn’t that why Zaka volunteers scraped up every piece of bone, collected all the blood, as well as the ashes of those who had been slaughtered on October 7). Is there some middle ground, like examining and honoring the body, while treasuring historical artifacts? Each side is deeply invested in its mission and fears intrusion from the other (and others, like grave robbers). I can see both sides and the deep emotional commitments on each.
Something that confused me was switching from Dan being on scene, then noticing Veingarten’s car and driving out of sight, and then flashing back to when each had received their texts (Veingarten not seeing his until after Havdalah, so Porat got there sooner) and then Stacey letting Samir and Amos know.
Again, nicely painted scenes.
Shmuel
· January 25, 2026 at 12:10 pm
Porat arrived first on friday night. Veingarten arrives saturday night and Porat brings Stacey saturday night. Combining all that in one chapter is confusing. I need to figure out a way to make it clearer about the timing. Thanks!
Glad you are seeing both sides. I’m trying to not make everything black and white and create cartoon villains and heros. Life is much more complex and subtle.
Elsie
· February 12, 2026 at 10:26 pm
Wow, “an Ossuary! This immediately drew me into what was going on in this mysterious story: He (Porat) looked back at the body. An unnatural bulge under the worker’s shirt. Porat reached in. Cold glass. A cobalt blue goblet, miraculously unbroken.” Great description! I can almost envision the goblet hidden in Ahmed’s shirt.
Next Porat As he ducked out of the cave, he scanned the opposite ridge and felt a chill. A black Mercedes sat idling on the access road facing him. Amber parking lights glinted off a black-on-white diplomatic plate.
Elsie
· February 12, 2026 at 10:43 pm
I wasn’t finished, yet my comment posted!
Next Porat “ducked out of the cave, scanned the opposite ridge and felt a chill. A black Mercedes sat idling on the access road facing him. Amber parking lights glinted off a black-on-white diplomatic plate.”)
Again, description is easy to visualize!)
Great description! (Shabbat was over. The apartment still glowed with THE SANCTITY of twenty-five hours cut off from the world. Wow!)
Next the excitement builds! (Vinegarten immediately dialed Deutsch. “A new burial site. Bring signs, loudspeakers—everything. If the Chilonim touched one bone, we shut the city down.”) This is getting very serious!
Another amazing sentence! “…tonight our ancestors have no one else to speak for them.”
THE CONCERN? “Haredim get there first, we could lose what’s buried there forever.” Elsie
Porat intrigued me the most. And yes Your Story is cohesive! THE STAKES? Important history could be lost forever!
GUSH HALAV, UPPER GALILEE – SPRING, 33 C.E.
The rhythmic clanging of his father’s chisel was the heartbeat of the morning.
Eleven-year-old Yossi sat perched on a massive, sun-warmed basalt boulder just outside the synagogue’s construction site. He leaned forward, crushing a sprig of wild hyssop between his palms, the peppery scent mingling with the fine white dust of pulverized limestone that hung in the air.
JISH, UPPER GALILEE – SUNDAY, DAWN
A dark silhouette emerged from the mist. Ibrahim, a man with tough hands and a weathered face, approached the van.
“Ya hala... bil-akhir,” he said, his voice a low growl. “About time. The plane’s waiting.”
Samir scanned the farm.
A small, unpaved road cut through the field. Wide enough for a small plane to take off and land unnoticed, though recent rains had made the earth soft.
FRENCH HILL, JERUSALEM – FRIDAY, 3:45 P.M.
Fifteen minutes before he died, Ahmed wiped rain from his eyes and jammed the bulldozer’s throttle forward. The site was deserted. The other workers had left hours ago for the weekend, but Ahmed needed the overtime. It was a cold Friday afternoon in March 1999, and his son’s medication had to be paid for by Monday morning.
The engine roared, flooding the cab with the stench of diesel and wet earth as he drove the blade toward the final ridge of Judean limestone. He braced for the familiar jar of impact, but it never came. The machine lurched as the metal shovel punched through the rock face and plunged into a void.
7 Comments
Susan Smith · January 19, 2026 at 2:59 pm
My first thoughts in Chapter 1 were of the Qumran Cave discovery years ago. In chapter 2, I began to think of the ongoing conflict between the Haredim and the secular. Neither of my thoughts may have a thing to do with where the story goes, but I’m just giving my initial thoughts.
Shmuel · January 19, 2026 at 4:47 pm
Thanks Susan… A major theme of the book is the contrasting world views of the religious and the secular. It plays itself out every day here in Jerusalem. It will be a major factor in the next elections. By the way, the novel occurs in March of 1999, a month before the elections. Ehud Barak and Binyanim Netanyahu are battling to become Prime Minister.
ChanaEster · January 22, 2026 at 12:35 am
I immediately picked up on what Susan said–simplistically, it appears to be protecting archeological evidence of our ancient history and connection with The Land versus the religious obligation to honor the dead and treat the body with integrity (isn’t that why Zaka volunteers scraped up every piece of bone, collected all the blood, as well as the ashes of those who had been slaughtered on October 7). Is there some middle ground, like examining and honoring the body, while treasuring historical artifacts? Each side is deeply invested in its mission and fears intrusion from the other (and others, like grave robbers). I can see both sides and the deep emotional commitments on each.
Something that confused me was switching from Dan being on scene, then noticing Veingarten’s car and driving out of sight, and then flashing back to when each had received their texts (Veingarten not seeing his until after Havdalah, so Porat got there sooner) and then Stacey letting Samir and Amos know.
Again, nicely painted scenes.
Shmuel · January 25, 2026 at 12:10 pm
Porat arrived first on friday night. Veingarten arrives saturday night and Porat brings Stacey saturday night. Combining all that in one chapter is confusing. I need to figure out a way to make it clearer about the timing. Thanks!
Glad you are seeing both sides. I’m trying to not make everything black and white and create cartoon villains and heros. Life is much more complex and subtle.
Elsie · February 12, 2026 at 10:26 pm
Wow, “an Ossuary! This immediately drew me into what was going on in this mysterious story: He (Porat) looked back at the body. An unnatural bulge under the worker’s shirt. Porat reached in. Cold glass. A cobalt blue goblet, miraculously unbroken.” Great description! I can almost envision the goblet hidden in Ahmed’s shirt.
Next Porat As he ducked out of the cave, he scanned the opposite ridge and felt a chill. A black Mercedes sat idling on the access road facing him. Amber parking lights glinted off a black-on-white diplomatic plate.
Elsie · February 12, 2026 at 10:43 pm
I wasn’t finished, yet my comment posted!
Next Porat “ducked out of the cave, scanned the opposite ridge and felt a chill. A black Mercedes sat idling on the access road facing him. Amber parking lights glinted off a black-on-white diplomatic plate.”)
Again, description is easy to visualize!)
Great description! (Shabbat was over. The apartment still glowed with THE SANCTITY of twenty-five hours cut off from the world. Wow!)
Next the excitement builds! (Vinegarten immediately dialed Deutsch. “A new burial site. Bring signs, loudspeakers—everything. If the Chilonim touched one bone, we shut the city down.”) This is getting very serious!
Another amazing sentence! “…tonight our ancestors have no one else to speak for them.”
THE CONCERN? “Haredim get there first, we could lose what’s buried there forever.” Elsie
Porat intrigued me the most. And yes Your Story is cohesive! THE STAKES? Important history could be lost forever!
Shmuel · February 13, 2026 at 7:29 am
Thank you so much Elsie for the feedback!